How To Improve A âDump Truckâ Ad By Folowing The 2 Golden Rules That Allllllll Meta Ads Must Obey
Hereâs the example sent in by a business ownerâŚ
You may spot a few things immediately wrong. Like they are going for a professional angle, but there are missing capital letters and misspellings. So that doesnât make a good impression. And in this case, I would go a step furtherâŚ
But first, just bear in mind, the sender sent this in without ANY context⌠So Iâm working with nothing but my best idea of how to help him without ever working in the âdump truckâ business myself⌠So weâre going to tear it up the best we can for him.
And there are two other obvious points for improvement here. I call them The 2 Golden Rules:
Simplify for clarity
Make an immediate offer.
Letâs rewrite the ad real quick and youâll see exactly what I mean:
â Quick Rewrite â
Haulage Services Serving ALL Of Toronto.
Reliable. No hassle. Guaranteed đ¤
Fill out the easy form and get a free same-day quote within 24-hours Monday-Friday, 9am-5pm.
With âXâ years experience, we take care of all the difficult logistics, coordination and transportation, so you can focus on the day-to-day planning and execution of your projects.
â Commentary â
Do you see how much more simple and easy to read that is?
This is really important because people donât have a lot of time. If youâre reading this you MUST be very passionate about growing your busines, because most people donât have the attention span⌠So you have to remember that, especially in an industry like haulage.
And do you see how we got straight to the point with an offer of a free quote within just 3 lines? I would DEFINITELY make a feature of this in the creative image and/or the Headline too!
âŚTalk about multi-tasking! Which reminds me. Youâve probably got a lot on. While you could learn how to write great ads by reading all my blog posts and doing it yourself, itâs a lot easier, faster and more cost effective to get a professional to do it. So while youâre here:
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