We got this question from a car detailing business:
I run a mobile detailing business , I’ve been running Facebook ads, door to door sales , sharing on groups in the local area on Facebook ,starting to find business meetings in my area , I’m looking for ways to advertise my business to local people , and my target audience is older folks , I just have a hard time finding new customers . I am leaving an ad here if you can give me some tips on maybe what to fix .
Here’s their original ad.
How To Rewrite This For Much Better Results
Here’s a first draft rewrite that would work better. Of course if we were to work with this client, we would build creative, define the offer a bit more… either way we are confident this fun first draft will easily outperform simply by changing the body copy:
HL: Do you want your car to look as good as new - inside AND out?
We provide that with pristine car detailing.
Book now for $15 off.
No hassle. Reliable. Easy to book. We come to you.
CTA: Message us for a free quote (messenger) / Apply now (to a form) / Call now
